My Jungle

It was surreal. There it was. My new home. The creation of crinkles surrounded my fleshy jaw as I endlessly smiled, portraying my excitement allowing all other thoughts to drown in the abyss. Colour, space, walls, toys, tables! The carpet was tender, the walls gleamed, the windows glistened. I was Tarzan encased in a captivated jungle of my own. Newly imported furniture towered upon me like trees radiating the reflection of the colonial light of the sun, creating this vibrant hue. How could something so new feel like a brother that I always had? Laughter, transcending music and the intense sound of my mother’s knife on the chopping board were the sounds of nature in my own jungle. The smell of my mother’s cooking blended with the overpowering lavender air freshener created an essence of tenderness. My mother, father and sister always embraced me with love and warmth, protecting me like bubble wrap. Couches, stools, tables, rugs, cabinets smiled back at each other as if they were friends being entered into a class together. Meanwhile, I was the teacher of my own school of toys, scattered across the floor providing me fun, distracting my consciousness of time. They were everywhere. From the catastrophic cupboard to the white window sills. River like reflections of just my eyes and my forehead could only be seen, blurred due to the short height I possessed at a young age. Senselessly swinging from room to room I always ended up perching in the most sacred part of the jungle… my own room. My room represented a barren cave allowing me to feel independent which I always adored as I no longer wanted to feel like child. It presented an atmosphere of tranquility. Peacefulness. Serenity. It rejuvenated me to be present in this loving atmospheric jungle. I rest upon the cascade of soften pillows and sheets, eyes open staring at the ceiling above. Enclosed. Loved. It was surreal. Here it was. My new home.

It was no longer surreal. Creases on my jaw were the only remains of the good old days, where only a expert geologist of the face could pick out the emotions of my past in its rock hard stature. The only crinkles vivid was the WiFi symbol scrunched on my forehead from the anxiety and stress of my world. Windows and walls groomed. In sadness. Boredom. Emptiness. The now colourless carpet created such a rough texture it generated friction in between my toes as I strolled around the house. Although I was still indulged in the same jungle, it felt if deforested with the absent of both my father and sister. The wore down furniture of the couches, chairs and tables felt old as I was now overgrown for this place. Dust like moss masked the furniture, no longer radiating a reflection, but instead creating a black and white hue. My brother was no longer the same. Silence. Deathly hollows of silence. Sound was non existent with my mother always at work and the disappearance of both of my sister and father, leaving me with the artificial sound of company forthcoming from my phone. Putrid smells of leftover domino’s pizza boxes bombarded on the kitchen bench mixed with sweaty smelly socks brought an aroma of a long night out. The bubble wrap had popped. I was now isolated, alone, embraced in anguish and doubt of my teenage life. Classmate appliances were bored of each other as if they were practicing their times tables with each other for years. Meanwhile my previous class of toys were now abandoned, resting locked away in a cardboard box on the window sill reminiscing the movie of Toy Story. I turned towards the windows. Despised by the clear vivid full portrait reflection of what I have become. Not even the once tranquil cave could blockade the change in myself and this house. My cave had collapsed puncturing the atmosphere. It was no longer tranquil. Peaceful. Serene. I no longer wanted to be alone and independent. I yearn for the embracement of love and company. Instead, I am forced to cage my love through the surrounding of my cushioned pillows and sheets. I lay restless upon my bed, eyes opened towards the ceiling. Defeated. Here it was. Surreal? My home?

Creative Writing Plan

My House

My house at the age of 7My house at the age of 16
Everything felt big
Dad and Sis was here
Excitement of a new house
Toys = Fun
Colour = Vibrate, colourful
Sound = Tv, laughter, sister playing guitar/piano, kitchen utensil when mum cooks
Smell = air freshioner lavender
New Furniture introduced like a foreign student entering a brand new welcoming school
Furniture gleaming
Sister chasing me, dad pranking me. 
Every morning, the excitement of watching spongebob

Everything feels small
Me and mum left, rasping voice of my mum
Disappointment of house, ungrated full when comparing. 
Hw = Stress
Toys = feel like Andy like toy story. 
Dim colours
Sound = Empty, Silence 
Smell = mixture of deoderant and stench of unwashed clothes lying helplessly on the floor. 
Furniture now looks bored and old sick of each other. 
Furniture rusty/dusty 
Accompanied by the articificial voice of my phone. 
Every morning, depressed comparing my life to those on insta. 
Titanic and Iceberg

Language Techniques 

Language TechniqueExample
Parallel construction
Simple sentence
Compound sentence
Complex sentence
Rhetorical question


Tv, laughter, sister playing guitar/piano, kitchen utensil when mum cooks
Silenced, only had the aritcial sound of my phone to accompany me like it was non digetic sound added in a film. 
PeopleMum, Dad and Sis comforting me like bubble wrap protecting somethingThe bubble wrap had popped. 
RelationshipMy heart, Titanic, the departure of my father, the iceberg
EmotionLove and stuffEmptiness, a missing jigsaw peice in my heart
HueVibrantBlack and White, Ying and yang
SizeBig, Small, Outgrown
FurnitureNew furniture gleamed, excited to meet their new class mates for life. Furniture looks bored and sick of each other
Lights were broken, didnt even have the gleam of my fathers smile upon me. 

Significant Connections

It is a choice that us humans make on whether we choose to self sacrifice for the savoir of others. The judgement of our circumstances such as our relationship, individual survival, emotions, numbers and religion can influence our descion to save or to not to save another. The texts: “Touching the Void”, written by Joe Simpson, “Into thin air”, written by Jon Krakauer, “Alive”, written by Paul Piers Read and “Into the wild”, written by Jon Krakauer all address people’s decisions and actions to self sacrifice for the saviour of others in different circumstances. It is those who can think rationally and contemplate the consequences often make the correct descion whether to self sacrifice for another. However it is those without the killer instinct to make a descion who act purely on their emotions and ambitions often end in failure. 

In the text “Touching the Void” authored by Joe Simpson, the viewer sees Joe fighting for his survival due to him breaking his leg while Simon contemplates whether to risk his life to save Joe. The reader learns through this event is that as human nature we have to make the judgement on whether our life is worth the risk to save another.

This is shown when Joe’s ice axes slips out of the ice causing him to hit the slope at the base of the cliff shattering his right knee. Simon’s initial reaction to Joe’s broken leg is “I knew where we were, I took in everything around me instantly, and knew he was dead. It never occurred to me that I might also die. I accepted without a question that I could get off the mountain alone. I had no doubt about that.” This teaches the reader that Simon clearly values his life over Joe’s as he has concluded that Joe is going to die as he feels the risk of his life to save him is too great. This also teaches the reader that Simon values his life over Joe’s as he is without a doubt accepting that when push comes to shove and a high level of danger occurs he is willing to leave Joe and safely descend Siula Grande alone. This teaches us about human nature that we have to make the judgement on whether our life is worth the risk to save another. Is your really worth the risk to save another? What level of risk is tolerable? Or will the feeling of guilt haunt you knowing you could’ve done more influence your decision to save another. Another example of where this is shown is Simon’s thoughts as he follows closely behind Joe descending with his broken leg. “I knew I couldn’t leave him while he was still fighting for it… It just seemed a waste. It would be pointless. I kept staring at him expecting him to fall.” This teaches the reader that Simon’s logical brain does not want to self sacrifice the risk of his life to save Joe however he cannot fixate his emotion to leave Joe while he is still fighting for his survival. This teaches us about human nature is that our relationships can determine how much we are willing to self sacrifice for the savior of others. Would your risk your life to save Joe if you were each others climbing partner for years? As the reader I am intrigued to see Simon’s reaction if this was his mother for instance. Would he react in the same way? Or will a stronger relationship be enough for him commit to sacrificing his life to save his mother. This quote also teaches the reader that Simon’s logical brain is telling him that the odds of Joe’s survival is minimal and to risk his life trying isn’t worth the risk. It also teaches the reader Simon wants Joe to fall so he won’t have the guilt and pressure if he leaves the mountain alone. Enviably as danger approaches with a nearby storm, Simon decides to put his safety before Joe’s and leaves him by cutting the rope. “There was no option left to me… I reached down again, and this time I touched the blade to the rope.” This shows that Simon does not commit to saving Joe as the sacrifice becomes too great. This teaches the reader the Simon makes a quick rational decision that he values his life over Joe’s. As human’s the decision sacrifice the risk of your life for someone else ultimately comes down to whether you value your life over another.

In the text “Into Thin Air” written by Jon Krakauer, the reader sees Rob Hall choosing to assist Doug Hansen to the summit of Mount Everest knowing the consequences of disobeying the strict turn around and Doug’s health condition. The reader learns through Rob’s actions is that as humans we can get so caught up in saving/helping others that we tend to forget to help ourselves first. 

Rob Hall is a mountaineer guide assisting a group up Mount Everest in 1996. Previously Rob has denied one of his clients named Doug Hansen who’s ambition is to reach the summit after being so close in 1995. Rob’s actions to not turn around Doug after seeming very weak and incapable of reaching the summit by the strict turn around time costed both of their lives. “Hall did not turn Hansen around at 2:00 P.M. – or, for that matter, at 4:00, when he met his client just below the top… Hall placed Hansen’s arm around his neck and assisted the weary client up the final forty feet to the summit”. This teaches the reader that Rob chooses to sacrifice the risk of his life on the dangerous, unforgivable terrain to save Doug from the mental pain of not being able to accomplish his ambition. This also teaches the reader that Rob’s emotions of guilt has influenced his decision to assist Doug to the top instead of descending safely down together. This teaches us about human nature is that our emotions can influence whether we help others before ourselves. In this case Rob needed to be mentally strong and act logically instead of emotionally to keep both himself and Doug physically safe. The author believes especially due to Rob’s occupation  that this was a very uncharacteristic and foolish desicion because at the end of the day safety is priority. However at the end of the day we are not a robot we are human therefore it is extremely difficult to ignore our emotions. Due to Rob being a very experience mountaineer who has perceived to have survived the worst, Rob chooses to stay with Doug who is diminished at the summit attempting to descend with him ignoring commands to descend alone. “At 4:53 he got on the radio and strongly urged Hall to descend to the South Summit… During radio calls from Hall at 5:36 and again at 5:57 Cotter implored his make to leave Hansen and comedown alone.” This teaches the reader that Rob has overrated his capability leading to the ignorance to help himself before Doug consequently leading to his death. This teaches us about human nature is that our cockiness to bite off more than we can chew often leads to our downfall. Sometimes we need to make the rational decision to help ourselves before others. In these life or death situation we must ignore the thought of opinions on our desicions and learn to be selfish to save ourselves.  This is different to “Touching the void” because in this text Rob’s downfall came down to his misjudgment of the situation, his capability and letting his emotions to take over him to sacrifice the risk of his life to help others before himself to save Doug’s ambition haunting him but also his survival.  Whereas in “Touching the void” Simon makes the rational decision to save himself over Joe by cutting the rope as he slowly starts to slip off the mountain in order for his own survival. If Rob has just acted like Simon in a life or death situation and choose to protect his survival before others Rob would’ve been able to see another day. This is where as humans sometimes we need to make the judgement to help ourselves before others.

In the text “Alive” authored by Paul Piers Read, the reader sees Roy and Vizintin sticking with Carlitos to keep him alive in a practice expedition but also Canessa and Parrado persevering through the fatal terrain of the Andes in order to save the others isolated in the Fairchild aircraft after its crash. The reader learns through both events is that perseverance is key in helping/saving those in need.

As the days go by in the Fairchild after its crash food slowly diminishes and more lives are lost. The remaining survivors therefore made the decision to no longer wait for help and instead try find civilization instead. They therefore sent out practice expeditions to see who was the most capable for the ultimate escape. However on one of these practice expeditions Carlitos almost came to his death as the conditions began to worsen and his health started to deteriorate. “Carlitos were close to panic… I can’t, I can’t. Leave me. You go on. Leave me here to die. Come on, Carlitos; said Roy through his tears. ‘For God’s sake, come on! Think of your family…’Get up you sissy,’ said Vizintin. We’ll all freeze if we stay here’… ‘I’m a sissy… I admit it. You go on’. But they would not leave, and they bombarded Carlitos with a mixture of exhortation and abuse that eventually brought him to his feet again… A little later he collapsed again in the snow… ‘You go on’ he said… But again Vizintin Harley would not abandon him”. This teaches the reader that both Vizintin and Roy sacrificed the risk of their lives in the harsh conditions to save Carlitos life. It teaches us about human nature is that persistence is key to saving those in need. As humans we tend to give up easily when a difficult problem is faced which is why our major problems such as poverty remain unsolved. If we all just persevered more when things got tough we would be able to make a difference and success would become more and more possible. For example if Roy and Vizintin did not persevere in motivating Carlitos in the harsh conditions Carlitos would have certainly died. However even with knowledge that perserverance equals success, humans still do not perservere in tough situation because as humans hate the hussle and pain that is involved. Another example of this theme is when Canessa and Parrado perseveres through the odds of finding civilization through the formidable terrain of the Andes to save those in the Fairchild. “Then Canessa said, ‘I think we should go back’ … This mountain’s is much too high. We’ll never reach the top. With every step we take we risk our lives. It’s madness to go… ‘Well, I’m going back anyway,’ said Canessa. ‘And im going on, said Parrado.” This teaches the reader that Parrado’s persistence to keep going to keep going over the odds that influenced Canessa is the key factor to why those in the Fairchild were saved. The authors thoughts on this desicion is that the author is very grateful however the author believes that the desicion to leave shouldv’e been much earlier as this would have saved more lives. It also teaches the reader if it wasn’t for the selfishness and braveness of the two men to risk their lives to save the other survivors in the Fairchild the others would have never been found. This teaches us about human nature is that it is those who step out of their comfort zone is what separate those who do and do not accomplish their ambitions which in this case was making it out of the Andes alive. However for a high reward there is a high risk. Is it worth the risk? The determining if the risk is worth it ultimately comes down to how bad do you want it. For Canessa’s and Parrado’s survival and those to save themselves and those in the Fairchild for them the risk is definitely worth it. This also teaches us about human nature is that we have to make the judgement whether sacrificing the risk of your life is worth to save more. If you were in Parrado’s and Canessa’s situation what would you do? Would you be selfish and stay in the relative safety of the Fairchild. How many people would it take for you to sacrifice your life. For Canessa and Parrado is was a total of 16. This text is different to “Touching the void” because in this text Roy and Vizintin perseveres to staying and motivating Carlitos ultimately saving his life even when the condition get worse jeopardizing their lives even further. Even with both Canessa and Parrado they both persevered through the dangerous terrain of the Andes even when things seemed impossible rewarding them their survival and the savior of the others in the Fairchild. Where as in “Touching the Void” Simon does not choose to persevere in saving Joe when things got tough leaving Joe through the struggle to survive on Siula Grande with a broken leg. This is because clearly Simon made the decision that one life is not enough to risk his own. Simon’s actions to not preserver could have easily killed Joe however lucky for him Joe had a strong mentality and made it out alive.

In the text “Into Thin Air” written by Jon Krakauer, the reader sees a old man named Ron Franz get attached to a boy named Chris McCandless who he has just met. Chris McCandless however decides to leave Franz to accomplish his ambition leave Franz in a unexpected hurt. This teaches the reader about human nature is that sometimes in our lives we have to self sacrifice for others even if it means nothing to you because it could mean a lot more to someone else. 

Chris McCandless is a young adult who has thrown away his background of his family, degree and past experiences live a new life of excitement and danger in the quiet wildnerness alone. However on his travels he meets this old man named Ron Franz who helps him on his travels. They both end up enjoying each others company and Franz decides to adopt him due to him feeling so attached. McCandless however declines the offer as he would rather accomplish his ambition of traveling to Alaska alone. “Even when he was sleeping, I was happy just knowing he was there… My mother was an only child he explained. So was my father. And I was an only child. Now that my own boy’s dead, I’m the end of the line. When I’m gone, my family will be finished, gone forever. So I asked Alex if I could adopt him… McCandless, uncomfortable with the request, dodged the question… And now he slipped painlessly out of Ron Franz’s life as well. This teaches the reader that Franz is lonely and had affection and love for McCandless and felt McCandless was the solution to forget about his dreadful past. This also teaches the reader McCandless is selfish as he puts his ambitions over giving his love to Franz for him to no longer be lonely but also save him mentally from his tormenting past of losing all of his loved ones. This teaches us about human nature is that we have to take a step back and place ourselves in other people’s perspectives to understand their struggles and difficulties. Often as human we are oblivious to the consequences of our actions towards other people, thinking primarily on ourselves. If we just took the time to place ourselves in other people’s perspectives and think of the effects of our actions towards them, this would enable us to make the correct decision whether to help others. For instance if McCandless just took the time to place himself in Franz’s perspective this would have influenced his actions to temporarily hold his ambitions to give the loving and care that Franz truly deserves and needs. The author believes that McCandless was very fortunate with his life and his descion was very greedy and self centre and believe that if he was in McCandless situation he wouldv’e not done the same. This is different to “Into Thin Air” as Rob Hall decided to self sacrifice the risk of his life to assist Doug Hansen to the summit so that he would accomplish his ambition, knowing his weak condition and disobeying the strict turn around time. This is because although this mean’t relatively no significance for Rob Hall, he was able to place himself in Doug’s perspective and understood what this would mean to him influencing his desicion to self sacrifice for Doug. Rob understood that if he hadn’t chose to assist Doug to the top his ambition will have haunted him for the rest of his life especially being so close on two attempts. So with Rob choosing to self sacrifice the risk of his life to assist him, Doug would have been put out of his misery and gained a real sense of accomplishment. However for the text “Into the Wild” McCandless chooses to not self sacrifice his ambitions temporarily to give affection and love to Franz who really deserves and needs its because he puts himself before others and does not realize that although it means nothing to him it means a lot to Franz. Due to McCandless selfishness to not place himself in Franz’s perspective this has made him oblivious to consequences of his action. If McCandless just placed himself in Franz’s shoes and sacrificed his ambitions temporarily to accompany Franz this wouldv’e meant the world to him as he would no longer feel lonely, hurt and also make Doug forget about his tragic past.

A person desicion to self sacrifice for the savior of others is determined by their: relationships, emotions, religion, circumsatance and tolerance of sacrifice. This is evident in the texts: “Touching the void”, written by Joe Simpson, “Into thin air”, written by Jon Krakauer, “Alive” written by Paul Piers Read and “Into the wild”, written by Jon Krakauer, as here key characters were faced with different circumstances where the desicion had to be made whether to self sacrifice to save those enduring mental and/or physical pain. The reader has learn’t that as humans to descion to save another in a life or death situation ulimatelty comes down to whether you value your life over another. The reader also learns about life through the text “Into thin air” is that sometimes no matter how much effort or perserverance you may give fortune may just not be on your side. Another key message learn’t through the texts is that are emotions is massive contributing factor in why we do or do not save another such as the selfishness shown by McCandless “Into the wild”. 

1.1 Written Text Essay: “Touching the Void”

1.) Describe at least one important technique used in the written text. Explain how this technique helped you to understand one or more key ideas.

What if you were given a story that drastically changed your life. Would words be justice to explain what you have been through. How would you portray your story. For Joe Simpson the author of “Touching the void” he was able to utilize  language techniques: foreshadowing, personification and symbolism to drastically influenced my perspective on the emotions, the events, survival and relationships within this text. The use of these language techniques have taught me determination and sacrifice is what separates those who do and do not accomplish their ambitious, human nature stands inferior against nature and human nature possesses this inner conscious acts on our decisions.  

 The repeated use of foreshadowing first occurs at the beginning of the text before the story was even told. “…but the dreamers of day are dangerous men, for they may act their dreams with open eyes, to make it possible”. This quote  help the reader understand that the ambitions of the men has lead to a problematic event or ending. Suspense is created  as the reader is now anticipating a horrific event somewhere throughout the text. It teaches me that determination and sacrifice is what separates those who do and do not accomplish their ambitious. However those with the will power to accomplish their ambitious must go out their comfort zone and undertake a high risk for a high reward. Is it worth the risk? For some the risk is taken and success is the final outcome but tragically for others the risk is taken and failure can only be the true outcome. Foreshadowing also occurs when Simon lowers Joe when descending from Siula Grande. “Hes trying to be quick… that’s all. I knew it to be true, but there was still something wrong”, “It was the slope. Of course! I should have thought of it earlier. It was much steeper, and that could mean one thing – I was approaching another drop” and “A sense of great danger washed over me. I had to stop”. These quotes have been placed relatively close to each other to emphasise that a tragic event is about to take place as it constantly indicates something is wrong. The reader understand that human nature must either trust their ‘gut instinct’ or logical brain to make decisions about their safety. So which would you choose? Its hard to argue against your logical brain but science proves that your gut instinct should always be trusted. Foreshadowing shown in the quotes enables the reader to connect with the characters anxiety with some of their own experiences. Due to my knowledge I can relate this use of foreshadowing to another text named “Into thin air” written by Jon Krakauer…

The first significance use of personification is at the event of Joe Simpson  breaking his leg. “It obeyed no commands…caused every sort of agony…gave myself up to the pain.” The reader understand that Joe perceives his leg to be detached almost if it was not his. The reader understand that human nature may associate inanimate objects with human like actions which is why we can feel emotion towards this inanimate objects. I can relate this experience to when I had sleep paralysis where body would not obey my commands to move. Joe must be feeling panic and shock as those were the emotions I felt. Personification also occurs when Simon Yates comments on the mountain while descending Siula Grande. “I felt watched. Something in the crescent summits and ridges looked down on me and waited…I was about to die; I knew it and they knew it.” The reader understand that Simon perceives the mountain to be superior,  ready to take his life in revenge of leaving Joe to die. The reader also understand  that no matter how prepared or strong you may be, human nature stands inferior against the brutality of what nature beholds. Ambitious adventurers like the men often disregard this which is why tragedies occur due to the cockyness of human nature.  It also teaches me that human nature feel guilt after doing a sin which is why we believe in the superstition of karma.

Symbolism first occurs with the rope, being most significant Simon cuts the rope. “If I hadn’t cut the rope, I would have certainly have died”. 

“I couldn’t bring myself to dispense with the comforting reassurance of the rope”. The rope symbolizes the connection and accountability of Joe and Simon. This is shown because Joe was reluctant to untether from the rope even though he knew the rope was not going to save him if he were to fall again. The quote teaches the reader that as humans we perceive that survival is most likely when staying with the pack which is why when put it in isolation or stressful situations when tend to rely on our group/individuals for guidance and support. Symbolism also occurs with the light when Joe falls into a crevasse.  “…It had me so fixated that I forgot about the uncertain floor below and let myself down the rest of the rope. I was going to reach that sun beam. I knew it then with absolute certainty”. The reader understand that the light beaming through the crevasse symbolizes motivation and hope for Joe. This is shown because after glimpses of the light Joe no longer focuses on the odds of getting out but instead concentrates his attention to getting out. The light is motivation for Joe as I can imagine Joe seeing the light from the outside world reminding himself that this beautiful life of his is worth fighting for. This also teaches the reader motivation and hope is needed to accomplish any goal you may wish to achieve. This is why human nature often give up as they perceive their goals to be impossible. However with the belief and determination any ambition is possible. The voice is also another use of symbolism in text when Joe decides to fight for his survival after falling into a crevasse. “The voice was clean and sharp and commanding. It was always right, and I listened to it when it spoke and acted on its decisions”. The the reader understand that voice symbolizes a logical, commanding and responsible mind which commands Joe’s actions and decisions in moments of need. The voice also symbolizes a higher ranked, trusted second opinion almost if it were a resemblance of Simon. I perceive the voice to be like Simon because Joe had a very low self esteem perceiving Simon as his idol acting on his decisions, but also Simon was very commanding with his short syntax commands such as “No more fluting’s” and “Come up”. The voice also teachers the reader that humans possess this voice which helps them in different aspects of their lives. So what does the voice mean to you? For me the voice symbolizes company when alone which is why I find myself talking to myself in isolation. 

Joe Simpson the author of “Touching the void” has integrated the language techniques of foreshadowing, personification and symbolism to help the reader understand key ideas. It teaches the reader that determination and sacrifice is what separates those who do and do not accomplish their ambitious, human nature stands inferior against nature and human nature possesses this inner conscious which acts on our decisions.  

This essay is still not finished. I still need to extend my points on what the reader learns but also could thin it down more. 🙂

Significant Connections

Self Sacrifice To Save Others

Touching the void – Joe Simpson

Story line:

Scene where it shows self sacrifice: When descending from Siula after Joe Simpson and Simon Yates summit assault of Siula Grande (year), Joe breaks his leg and Simon has to make conscious decision whether he should either sacrifice the risk of his life in order to save his long time compatriot or descend down the mountain alone. In the beginning Simon decides to stick with Joe lowering him by 2 ropes as a belay. With Simon doing this he sacrificing to save a crippled Joe by undertaking physical pain such as dehydration, muscular pain, hypothermia and frostbite due to it taking longer to descend with Joe. However as the sight of death proceeds to come nearer as Simon’s legs can no longer hold Joe’s weight who has fallen of a crevasse and a storm beginning to condense Simon makes the decision to no longer sacrifice the risk of his life to save Joe by cutting the rope losing the connection and accountability of each other to instead put his life before Joe’s.

Into thin air – Jon Krakauer

Story line:

Alive –

Story line:

Into the wild – Jon Krakauer

Story line:



1.1 Written Text Essay: “Touching the Void”

Mountain, Rope, Voice

2.)Narrative Voice:
1st Person, 2nd Person, 3rd Person, Eye of God, different perspectives, Joe and Simon

3.)Figurative Language
Simile, Metaphor, Personification, Hyperbole

The combination of descriptive language and techniques for certain effects

Tension filled moments-Created through word choice and syntax

Sentence structures different types have different effects

Syntax, Word Choice, Dialogue

8.) Dialogue
Different speaker traits

Question 1 – Describe at least one important technique in the written text.

Question 3 – Describe a place or time where a main character felt very comfortable or uncomfortable in the written text. Explain how techniques helped you to understand the character’s reaction.


Significant Connections Plan:

Touching The Void

Main Characters
Joe Simpson
Simon Yates
Richard Hawking

Narrative perspective
1st person narrative

Base Camp
Siula Grande, West Face, 1985

Special uses of language

Self sacrifice for saving others
The power of the inner contions
The nature of survival

Not without my daughter, Into thin air, Children of the silk road,

Speech Part 2: Drafting

Intro: We’ve all experienced bad days. Whether it’s a traumatizing event like a death of loved one, to just something minor like forgetting your p.e gear that carries out throughout your entire day or maybe just an unpleasant event like being rejected by your crush…luckily that has never happened to me. We’ve all had bad days. Where we just feel like giving up. We internally ask questions like Why do I even try? Whats the point? Why am I even here? I just wanna go home. We’ve all experienced this throughout our entire lives and we will continue to for the rest of it. It is inhuman to enjoy the disappointing feeling of taking part in a bad day, where no matter what you do, things just don’t go your way. And that’s life. Nobodies perfect. But what if we could change that invalidating attitude towards that bad day and stay positive for once, to turn that terrible day into a better day, or a life lesson experience. Which outlines my topic of how to stay positive during a bad day. On the 4th of May 2018, I had perceived that I had hit the rock bottom of life, where I felt stuck in an endless loop of negativity. However during these tough times I had established 3 main points that turned my experience around.  The ability to see situations in a different perspective, the influence of music and the ability to smile. And what you are going to learn today, that can be used throughout your entire life is…that you can always be positive in a bad day.

Main Points:  


Perspective is the most crucial lesson to be learnt when experiencing a bad day. Perspective is an individuals particular attitude towards  regarding something or known as a point of view.  Every individual living organism in this planet has a perspective of whats in front of them. But why is perspective so important in staying positive in a bad day? Well, perspective is like taking yourself thousands of feet into the sky and realizing things could be a lot worse. It’s like the quote ‘I cried because I had no shoes, until I saw a man with no feet’. We will live in this big wide world where sometimes we forget that the world doesn’t revolve around us. Where we feel that when something goes wrong the world’s going to end. Well let me tell you something. You are not the only one living in this world that is struggling! Your not. So get that illusion out of your head that you are the only one out there struggling because there is bound to be someone else in this big scary planet that could be severally struggling way more than you are. Especially in first world countries like the beautiful New Zealand we live in today we tend to forget that most of our difficulties in life may be nowhere near the portions of a third world country like an African in Uganda. Let me demonstrate an example of this.  Last week I couldn’t over hear this girl in my geography class failing her math’s test saying “I’m so dumb” “I’m going to fail the year” “You know what I’m just gonna give up and drop out of school”. This girl perceived that her whole education had been thrown out the window by failing one math’s test. However if this girl looked through the eyes of another perspective she would’ve realized that she only failed one math’s test out of how many throughout the year. She could’ve realized she should be grateful that she isn’t according to UNESCO the 101 million African children that doesn’t even have the option for education. She could’ve realized she was extremely fortunate to not be born with a cognitive brain disorder such as autism which gives a massive disability in understanding subjects like math’s.  If I had I told this girl to look at her problems in a different perspective, and told her information like this, she would’ve then realized she is immensely lucky to be the situation she is currently in, and maybe instead of complaining she could’ve learnt that she isn’t dumb and maybe to just pay more attention in class or work a little bit harder. So before negative thoughts arise in a disappointing event, look at it at a different perspective and ask yourself this What could’ve been worse? and What did I learn from it?



The second point to staying positive in a bad day is the use of music. Music is much more powerful than you think it is. Its much more that its definition of written or printed signs representing the vocal or instrumental sounds. No, music is a art that can instantly change that negative mood no matter what circumstance your in. The first way it does this is because everyone loves music.  Humans naturally love listening or playing music. This is because music releases the chemical of dopamine which is the sensation of reward. Music does this by triggering blood flow to the brain that activates regions linked to the euphoric stimuli which is the area dopamine is released.  So just by listening to a 3 minute song like ‘I’m sexy and I know it’ can instantly make you feel better, and what’s not positive about feeling good. The second reason how music helps you get through a bad day is that music brings out your emotions. It does this by the lyrics, tempo or the sounds connecting with your mood. Music in this sense is a way to release all your concentrated emotions that you hide, in way we can enjoy so the only thing left in our system is motivation to get through the day. A specific example of this is by the greatest perceived by many rappers of all time, Eminem. Eminem lived through tough struggles like being bullied, dropping out, suicidal however Eminem was able to write songs to release all the negativity and emotions to get through the struggles of life. His specific song ‘Going Through Changes’ talks about his dear friend Proof who was shot outside a club on April 2009. The song remenises his struggles such as overeating, daytime napping, pill addiction and sorrow when Proof dies. Eminem was able to utilize music in this situation  to express his stressful emotions in a positive manner to gain motivation during these tough times. The final point of the use of music keeping you positive is by picking a song with a happy memory attached to it. The reason why this works is when listening to a song with a good memory attached to it, your mind automatically switches your train of thought to that memory and distracts you from the bad day you just had. Your mind can only consciously directly focus on one thing at a time. So for example I might choose the song…  And what’s cool about this is, after the song has finished and your confronted by your horrific day again, your mind is calm enough to realize, Hey this is not as bad as I thought it was before, and your now able to confront that bad day in controlled state. So just by singing or listening to a short segment of music during a bad day, can make you feel happier, release all your congested emotions and relax you enough to confront that bad day.



The third and final point to staying positive during a bad day is the ability to smile and laugh. Simple as it sounds, however not so easy to do when your having a bad day. We tend to forget the universal indicator of happiness the smile can be used throughout any situation. Instead, you naturally frown, shrug your shoulders, shake your head, or sometimes do silly gestures, or some people even choose to hit themselves like … Or what I do is, i’m not sure anyone can relate but is get annoyed at any small thing that could possible annoy me, like for instance if someone tells me to push in my chair I would be like… “Wowww, wowww, why don’t you push in the chair.  Your just lazy you big forehead!” Or if my pencil lead snaps I would be like “Oh great, now you snap. Watch me disown you for a pen…  These are all natural reactions to when something has gone wrong, but what if instead of creating these embedded negative gesture we choose to smile or laugh. The reason for this is, when you smile your brain releases the reward/happy chemical of dopamine like in music which for one keeps you positive, but second of all it releases serotonin. Serotonin is a chemical which is responsible to reducing stress levels. This is vitally important  because your mood towards a situation is elevated by your stress levels. This chemical released in our brains is very crucial as enduring low amounts of serotonin leads to aggression and depression. So just by smiling for 30 seconds , slowly erases depression.  Even if you have to fake it like “Oh my gosh i’m having such a bad day”, the effect remains the same. Studies show that participates who were instructed to smile recover on average 20% quicker than participates instructed to hold a neutral expression. So when enduring a bad day, do something that will make you smile. Like go out and play just dance with your friends, go watch a hilarious movie like grown ups, or play Minecraft and die a bunch of times… Well that’s what I do anyway. Whatever it may be, do an activity that will make you smile, because it will lower your blood pressure, release dopamine that will make you happier, release serotonin that reduce your stress levels and overall make you feel a lot more positive during or after a bad day.


It is part of the human journey to experience bad days. We all have bad days. And there’s absolutely nothing we can do about it because like I said before, nobodies perfect. However what we can change is our attitude towards a bad day that can make us more positive and motivated to get through the struggles of life. We can all do this by changing our perspective which we ultimately learn that we should be grateful that it could’ve been worse, we learn that through the struggles of bad days there’s always a lesson learn’t  and finally it’s okay to have bad days because you know what happy people know, is that happy people know there gonna have bad days. We can also do this by using the power of music where we learn that it makes you happy as it releases dopamine, we learn that it can release your bundle up emotions which can motivate you and we also learn that songs with memories can calm you enough to confront your bad day again. The final way we can also stay positive throughout a bad day is the ability to smile where we learn that it releases dopamine so you stay happy, it releases serotonin which reduces your stress levels and we learn that when having a bad day do something that will ultimately make you smile because that could well change your bad day to a not so bad of a day. I challenge you when confronting a bad day to not react so quickly and negatively. But instead take a deep breath and smile, look at it at a different perspective and confront your day instead of running away from it. 

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Speech Part 1: Planning

Topic: How to stay positive in a bad day

Intro: State the topic, Rhetorical Question, State main points, Listing, Grab the attention of the audience

Main Points: 

Perspective: Other world wide problem, People in Africa, Questioning yourself, how perspective changes mood, chain reaction, perspective determines your thoughts,

Music: upbeat music, emotive words, high notes makes happier people, a song with a happy memory attached to it, songs you like, evidence, experience

Smile/Laugh: stimulates areas in brain cognition and emotional processes, activates area in brain stimulates brain reward system of dopamine, lowers heart rate, blood pressure and other stress indicators, your mood is elevated by stress levels, evidence, smiling is contagious, fake it

“Dopamine increases our feelings of happiness. Serotonin release is associated with reduced stress. Low levels of serotonin are associated with depression and aggression,” says Dr. Gupta. “Low levels of dopamine are also associated with depression.”

Conclusion: Sum up points, Its alright to have a bad day, quote, rhetorical question